Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?

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There are different views on the causes of
violence
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in the world today. Some argue that it is connected to people's exposure to violent scenes on television and in films, whilst others point to wider problems in
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as unemployment, poor housing and education as the root of anti-social
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. It is my belief that
violence
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in the media plays a significant role in encouraging violent
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point is that as levels of
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in the media increase, so does young people's exposure to it. Even films aimed at children often contain
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and despite the difficulty of proving whether
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directly affects
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, it is hard not to be concerned. After all, children learn through modelling adult
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, so if the models they choose are violent
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it is highly likely that they may be violent themselves.
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, the way
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is portrayed in the media is often stylized resulting in
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being seen as attractive. People who are easily impressed may
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behave violently themselves.
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research has shown that aggressive
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is actually often the result of having aggressive parents, I still believe that the unrealistic way
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is shown in the media must have a negative result on
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.
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, the media
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have become
increasingly
globalized which
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globalized, which
means that
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in programmes or films can be viewed all over the world. I would argue that the increasing quantity and level of
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seen around the world must be a negative force in
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. In conclusion,
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it is difficult to prove beyond a doubt the effect of
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in the media on
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, I believe that the result
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the young, the unrealistic way it is shown and the global nature of media communications all have a significant and negative impact on
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.

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