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It is important to give children the chance to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#children #chance #act #decisions #age
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Now a
days
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day
, it is
debitable issue
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a debatable issue
debatable issue
 that juveniles should have complete freedom to take their decisions of their life from the childhood. I agree to some extent with
this
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 notion and believe that parents must support their kids and help them for their holistic development.
To begin
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 with, decision-making freedom
build
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builds
 the confidence in the child and they take
decision
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decisions
 according to their
creativityt
the ability to create
creativity
 because thrust them to the end of something may ruin their innocence and stifle their interest.
For example
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, when one
have
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has
 autonomy to take
actions
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action
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 his self-confidence get increased and with the capability, he
become
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becomes
 triumphant in his life.
on
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On
 the other side, children are not mature enough to take always right decisions and they
sometime needs
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sometime need
 their
guidian
a person who cares for persons or property
guardian
guiding
 to guide them, what is right and wrong for them. At the initial stage of their life; due to less experience and knowledge, toddlers may choose
wrong option
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the wrong option
 that will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 their future. To illustrate, in schooling, suppose a student is more interested in sports as compared to academic it doesn't mean that he will not study, at that time it's
parents responsibility
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the parents' responsibility
parents' responsibility
parent's responsibility
 to motivate
thier
of them or themselves
their
 child and assist him to choose subjects that are
essentitial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
 for him for survival in
this
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 cut-throat
competitional
of or involving computation or computers
computational
 world. To conclude,
although
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 having independence to take decisions boost the morale of the children,
however
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 total freedom may cause negative consequences in their future as they make decisions with the influence of others and in immaturity.
Thus
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, parents should keep eye on
kids
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kids'
 decision and support them in right while teach them in their wrong path.

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