You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear sir, I am

the

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new commerce student and staying in the shared room 201.

Roommate

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My roommate

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is very kind and accompanying me to the college and the downtown to get goods and knowledge about the city.

However

, I am facing multiple problems in the accommodation, like there are many beg bugs and other insects laying in the room and there is some sort of pub/club which creating lots of

noise causing

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noise-causing

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disturbed sleep

moreover

, we are facing problem with water and furniture I hope there is a need of a plumber and carpenter for tap leaks and crackle sound coming from the furniture. Here, I am requesting you to provide me

better

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with better

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accommodation options which help me to work properly. I have to submit some assignments soon so, I need some pleasant space, I am looking for

single

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a single

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room with no sharing and definitely not to the club side. Kindly let me know the what are the options available. You

thank

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thankfully

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fully

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me fully

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

162 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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