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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear sir, I am
the
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a
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 new commerce student and staying in the shared room 201.
Roommate
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My roommate
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 is very kind and accompanying me to the college and the downtown to get goods and knowledge about the city.
However
, I am facing multiple problems in the accommodation, like there are many beg bugs and other insects laying in the room and there is some sort of pub/club which creating lots of
noise causing
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noise-causing
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 disturbed sleep
moreover
, we are facing problem with water and furniture I hope there is a need of a plumber and carpenter for tap leaks and crackle sound coming from the furniture. Here, I am requesting you to provide me
better
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with better
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 accommodation options which help me to work properly. I have to submit some assignments soon so, I need some pleasant space, I am looking for
single
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a single
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 room with no sharing and definitely not to the club side. Kindly let me know the what are the options available. You
thank
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thankfully
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fully
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me fully
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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