Nowadays online shopping has become more popular, while some people argue in-store shopping would be better. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often argued that, online shopping more advantageous than in-store shopping.
Although
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I agree that online shopping is more convenient than in-store shopping. I think that in-store is
also
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useful to buy something in
markets
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the markets
. On the one hand,
convenience
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the convenience
of online shopping is that customers can purchase items from
comfort
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the comfort
of their own homes or workplace. Shopping is made easier and convenient for the customers through Internet. It is
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easy to cancel transactions.
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, there is no pressure in online shopping.
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, in physical stores, the sales representatives try to influence the buyers to buy the products. There can be some kind of pressure, whereas the customers are not pressurized in any way in online stores.
On the other hand
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, in physical stores you can experience your product. When you visit in-store shopping, you get to see and touch the items want to buy before spending your money.
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, personalized service helps you to choose perfect one or shows you substitute products.
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, if you can't find exactly what is it you want, the personalized service offered by brick and mortar stores can help you find that perfect item. To conclude, though I agree that online shopping is more convenient
by
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with
its a lot of offers, I think that in-store shopping
also
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play a major role to buy quality products.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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