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In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays educating
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tudent
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a student
the student
with all aspects of growing
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 requirements, is the basic necessity. Studying practical skills along with the academic studies is one essential need of society. Like, in f
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a few countries
in Europe, children varying in age from 11 to 13 attend schools to educate themselves with more practical skills as it helps them getting j
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jobs
 While some children confined themselves to school to learn academic values and
education
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. In my opinion, making school active in
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 aspects are important for
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students
the student
to grow f
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in
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 of work and it is explained
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 in my writing. For my
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 point of view,
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tudent
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students
the student
a student
must follow b
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the basic requirements
of proper
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 by actively involving themselves to the academic studies; studying basic t
ext books
according to or characteristic of a casebook or textbook; typical
textbooks
and theoretical knowledge by heart. It helps them g
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gain
to gain
enough confidence to know that they have known initial and basic rules of knowledge to follow the practical
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.
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, gaining enough definition of
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 academic knowledge gives enough self confidence to deal with the practical experience in their life. For
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, students should follow the study pattern to know the basic need of practical approach. As gaining enough part of
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education is both
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 is the key to lead the successful
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. For
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, just following one pattern is not enough.
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 but not the least, for a better opportunity in the future, dealing
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 aspects wisely are important for making a
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 grow in academic and practical
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. It is mostly getting it’s ways by introducing proper
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 parameters defining
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 approaches as the significant part of c
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children's
education
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