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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older

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Scores of parents fulfil every demand of their juvenile and even permit
then
objective case of they
them
 to do whatever they want. In my opinion,
this
 style of parenting is not a good reason of upbringing of their children and
this
 can lead to manifolds negative outcomes for
then
objective case of they
them
 in future. In the beginning, the foremost effect that kids should not ask and allow that they buy is that. Children is not
good decision maker
Suggestion
a good decision maker
good decision makers
 at
this
 age due to which they purchase unessential goods which leads to wastage of their
parents
Suggestion
parents'
 income.
However
, if children all demands are
fulfil
Suggestion
fulfilled
 than they will
indulged
Suggestion
indulge
 into bad
company as
Accept comma addition
company, as
 parents are allowing them to do anything that they want to do.
Moreover
, the kids become
disparate
arising from or marked by despair or loss of hope
desperate
 to buy things which they don't even need.
However
, the main reason of
this
 style of parenting have for kids as they get older. Children would eventually become spendthrift as they were not familiar with
this
 in their childhood, they will not know the value of money.
Moreover
, children don't have good moral and ethical values along with social skills because they don't help to respect and be polite
with
Suggestion
to
 anyone due to their childhood habits. To sum up,
this
 is not a good raising of their children as their parents are completing their all wishes and desires that will effect in
negative way
Suggestion
a negative way
negative ways
 in their future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
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