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People say that a child’s success is dependent on the way parents bring them up. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is a well known fact that all the people want to become a successful person in their life. Some people think that success of a
child
's is totally dependent on the parents. I partially agree with
this
 statement and I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, how
child
's success depends on their parents.
First
 and foremost point is behaviour. In the modern era, most of the things children learn from their parents
such
 as behaviour, way of talking and so on. If parents can treat their
child
 with good behaviour,
then
 the
child
 definitely gives respect to their parents as well as others.
Furthermore
, the parents should spend more time with their children and give knowledge about their culture with
this
 their
child
 always live at the touch of their history.
On the other hand
, teachers
also
 play a very important role in the life of children. In the modern era, if the teachers give proper knowledge about their education with
this
 they do not have any stress on their mind can easily pass their final exams.
Moreover
, the teachers should always help their students in their study because the teachers is only one thing who give any kind of knowledge to their children with
this
child
 become a very successful person in the future and earn more and more money to fulfil their needs. To conclude, I think that both the parents and teachers play a very important role in the life of children to become successful.
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