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The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars causes many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce these problems, should we discourage people to use cars?

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In the recent years, many people prefer to
use
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 personal
cars but
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cars, but
 the usage of these cars
have caused
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has caused
 problems.
This
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 essay will discuss about
these problems and about
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these problems, and about
 reducing them. I think we should discourage people from using personal cars.
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 to
this
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, the government can
also
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 encourage people to
use
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 public transportations.
Firstly
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,
traffic
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 intensity is really a huge problem recently.
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, people think using their personal cars is much more comfortable for them than using public
transportation
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.
Therefore
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, they prefer to
use
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 their personal cars and that causes
traffic
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 congestion especially during working hours.
For instance
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,
last
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 week, I was going to Istanbul with my
car
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 and you could not imagine the
traffic
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 in there. I got stuck
in
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on
 the Istanbul bridge for more than 3 hours because of the many personal cars. If I had taken the train, it would have been much
more easier
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easier
 than
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.
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, the increasing number of
cars causes
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cars, causes
traffic
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 accidents. Lately, I
have got
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have gotten
 into
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traffic accident
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a traffic accident
traffic accidents
 like
for example
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, I faced an accident
last
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 week. I was using my
car
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 in the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of the city and I stopped at the
traffic
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 lamps and someone hit me from the back side of the
car
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. Thankfully, no one was
injured but
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injured, but
 my
car
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 needed some
repairment
the act of returning money received previously
repayment
. Basically, personal cars crashing
onto
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into
 each other is very common and many people have lost their lives, unfortunately. Because of that, using public
transportation
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 can reduce
number
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the number
 of
car
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 crashes. In conclusion, people have to be aware of
this
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 kind of accidents and they should not prefer to
use
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 their own cars.
Also
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, governments have to encourage people to
use
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 public
transportation
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 and they can
also
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 give discounts on train, bus and other tickets.
Hence
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, people would like to
use
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 public
transportation
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 more.
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