Earlier, people wore clothes which were related to their culture. But now, people wear same type of clothes all over the world. Is this a positive development or negative development?

These days people dress up in attires representing different civilizations all over the world compared to a long time ago when they wore clothes in relation to their

culture

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only. I believe

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is a positive growth

world wide

involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope

worldwide

because

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its

the thing named or in question

unites different communities

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it is a business platform which earns revenue for the government

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leading to

development

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the development

of the country.

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, dressing in clothes considered to be

for

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a particular

culture

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brings different communities and countries together.

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is because, if someone wears an attire for a different

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culture it

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culture, it

shows support along with love to experience a different civilization

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, African prints “

ankara

the capital of Turkey; located in west-central Turkey; it was formerly known as Angora and is the home of Angora goats

Ankara

” are spreading tremendously all over the world

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various people outside Africa love dressing in them in order to represent Africa.

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in African countries nowadays, people are purchasing fashionable clothes produced by popular brands from

developed

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developing

countries

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Gucci and Forever Trendy

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Because of

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, people from various continents travel to Africa on

daily basis

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a daily basis

to experience African

culture

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as well as Africans

adapting

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adapt

are adapting

to the ways of other countries. Business platforms for selling different clothing are coming up

everyday

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every day

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Also

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Also, this

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plays a big role in Government revenue, Given that the majority of people are purchasing these attires on day to day life worldwide through shipping or by Air.

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instance in

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instance, in

Kenya, exportation of African print is high

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these earns government income which is used for growth in public services

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as hospitals, roads and social amenities. As a consequence selling different cultures

fabrics along

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fabrics, along

with clothing helps in country development as well as entrepreneurs. In conclusion, I believe that it is worthwhile for people to dress in

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(psychiatry) an abnormal absorption with the self; marked by communication disorders and short attention span and inability to treat others as people

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artist

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from other cultures.

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is because, it helps in bringing communities and countries together, showing support and love, exporting fabrics and clothes are beneficial for entrepreneurs and government.

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Feb 11, 2020

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