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*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

*IELTS Training By Simiyu Paul_R The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
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exportation of clothing in Colombia,
Japan
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 and
Myanmar
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 between 1999 and 2003 in
million
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 dollars.
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, at the beginning of the
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period
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Japan
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 had the highest rates. On contrary,
Myanmar
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 witnessed significant fluctuations
furthermore
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at the end
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 of the
period
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 it had the least number of exports. In 1999,
Japan
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 had the most sales in exporting clothes
of
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almost 600
million
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 compared to other countries. After one
year
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 it had a slight drop of around 50
million
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 , from 2000 to 2003
trend
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the trend
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 witnessed a steady drop hitting a low of nearly 500
million
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Colombia saw approximately 450
million
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 at the beginning of the
period
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 after three years the rate of sales rose steadily by 250
million
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. It experienced a slip
on
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in
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 the
last
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year
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 to 600
million
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. In 1999,
Myanmar
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 had 0 exports of clothes.
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 , in the following
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year
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 there was a sharp increase to 800
million
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 having the most sales that
year
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 in comparison to
Japan
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 and
colombia
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Colombia
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. In 2001 it reached a peak of approximately 940
million
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, one
year
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 later
Myanmar
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 saw a dramatic fall of about 600
million
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nevertheless
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at the end
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 of
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period
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the period
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 it had an incline to around 420million accounting for
least
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the least
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 exports compared to other regions.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, myanmar, million, period, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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