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some people claim that government should take action to ensure that people have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, believe that people should decide which way they prefer to leave their lives.what’s your opinion?

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It is apparent that every
government
 would display concerns for the health of its citizens. In the democratic country,
however
, it is
big
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the biggest
 question that how far the
government
 can intervene in the personal choice of
citizens
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the citizens
.
This
 essay examines the possible role of
government
 with
regard addressing the
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regard to addressing the
 issue of an unhealthy lifestyle. At the onset, it is understandable that
government
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the government
 would always be
concern
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concerned
 about well being of its citizens.
However
, it cannot decide what should be on the plate of citizens. If they do so, it would be tagged as
open violation
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an open violation
 against the fundamental rights of citizens. People have to be allowed to make their own choices. The
government
, on the regular basis, issue many health advisories and gives the information about healthy and unhealthy food habits. I certainly believe that people are judicious enough to make the
right
 choices. The health awareness that includes picking the
right
 food was not so prominent as ever before as it is today. If people decide to choose an unhealthy life style, they do it at their own risk. At best, there are certain benevolent jobs that the
government
 can perform in
this
 advantaged area. In many poor countries, yet people go to bed with an empty stomach and live a life in poor sanitation. Owing to the abject poverty, they do not have the fortune of a one-time meal even and remain undernourished. There comes the role of the
government
 because it is duty to feed these people by offering them free grains or at subsidized costs.
This
 will ensure that every child will grow healthy. In summary, the
government
 has no
right
 to impose its decision on
this
 point. They can create awareness and educate people about the healthy eating habits. Every citizen has a
right
 to healthy food, regardless of his financial situation.
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