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23. Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by governments or should it be responsible of the people for these service. Discuss with the example.

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Education
 and
health
care
 are
two
 elements for local citizens t
o make
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make
a living in our societies.
However
, the payment for these
two
 services v
ariety
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vary
in terms of local governments. Some people advocate that governments should be responsible for funding these
two
 services completely; while, others insist that it is people's personal responsibility to pay the fee. The essay will discuss both views and presents my personal opinion as well.
To begin
 with, universal h
ealthcare
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health care
and
education
 coverage will enhance the sensation of happiness of local residents for which they are more  willing to contribute themselves to their nations. Nobody will suffer from illnesses  due to financial issues and  no student will drop out of school due to poverty.
As a result
, nations will become more powerful and stronger due to their h
ealthy
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health
and well-educated citizens.
For example
, B
uhtan
a landlocked principality in the Himalayas to the northeast of India
Bhutan
butane
button
is one of small Asian countries with free
access
 to
health
care
 and
education
 for Buhtaneses since its beginning. The country is one of c
ountries
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the countries
with highest National Happiness Index and strongest military force. Free
access
 to
health
care
 and
education
 provide h
armonious environment
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a harmonious environment
for residents' growth, development and even thrive as well.
However
, no charge of
health
care
 and
education
 will
also
 bring some drawbacks to the nations as well. The
first
 one is that it might cause to abuse the services if residents and professionals who are in charge of
h
ealth
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the health care system
care
 system do not follow strict guidelines.
Therefore
, universal services will lead to burdens for governments' budgets. In addiction, the efficiency of
h
ealth system
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the health system
health systems
and motivation of
education
 might be diminished.
For example
, parents and children might take
e
ducation opportunity
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the educational opportunity
educational opportunity
an educational opportunity
as a grand and do not strike for them due to easy
access
. In Canada, universal h
ealthcare
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health care
system leads to longest waiting time for seeing specialists or operating.  In conclusion, free h
ealthcare
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health care
and
education
 coverage will bring either benefits and drawbacks listed above. It definitely makes ordinary residents happy and less stressful by eliminating f
inancial burden
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the financial burden
of medical bills and
education
 tuition.
However
, in order to maintain these
two
 services's qualities, clients should have
access
 to them properly or they will collapses and local citizens will suffer.
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