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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this?

#tourism #feel #trend
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 the tourism of citizens indicates some concerns in terms of problems from international
tourists
.
This
 essay will elaborate on some probable causes and positive solutions which can improve
this
 situation. There are some widespread reasons why local
people
 consider that
tourists
 who are from other countries would have some negative impacts on their societies.
Firstly
, the consciousness of
tourists
 about saving the environment of the
country
 where they visit is seen as the main reason,
for example
, some foreign
tourists
 often draw their marks on the wall in historical places like
temple
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 or
museum
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 as well as litter beautiful landscapes
such
 as famous beaches.
Secondly
, nowadays some
tourists
 take
advantages
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advantage
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from
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 visiting another
country
 to stay illegally. For instance, there are a large number of
people
 from developing countries
travel
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 to South
Korean
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 nowadays, and their purpose is to reside without being accepted
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immigration, so it would be complicated for the government of the
country
 to manipulate illegal immigrants.
Therefore
/
Subsequently
/Inevitably, some measures should be implemented to deal with these issues of international tourism. It is necessary for the host countries to be strict
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 tourism agencies about ensuring that they would not let their customers commit any unfit
behavior
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 which is mentioned above by giving some strict rules.
For example
,
the
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financial and prison punishments for
tourists
 who lack awareness should be implemented. Another remedy is that local
people
 especially youngsters can participate in some volunteer activities to introduce the beauty of their culture and landscape to
tourists
 so the visitors have more respect for the
country
 they visit. In conclusion, by conducting some positive solutions to resolve
common
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 negative
belief
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beliefs
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 of local
people
,
this
 situation would be better.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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