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buying things on the internet, such as books, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Online shopping is becoming the trend. Imagine getting everything you want without leaving the house, without having to drive through traffic, not standing in line at the check out and not having to carry and pack them all in your car. What a dream, easy and convenient. Not just that the amount of time you spend shopping can be significantly less. Some people
also
 say it saves them money in a way all other products are not right in front of them avoiding temptations. I personally like shopping online for dry goods, like books, clothing, shoes and accessories. Because I get more choices in terms of colour, sizes and style.
Also it
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Also, it
 gives me the hype of expecting something like a present coming for me.
On the other hand
, shopping online comes
wit
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with
 disadvantages.
Firstly
, you can be scammed and end up paying for something you'll never get.
Secondly
, the item you ordered can be disappointing
,
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,
it's not what you expected, so
then
 comes the stress of returning it to be replaced or refunded.
Thirdly
, it's hard to guarantee the quality of the item without actually seeing it and feeling it. You will
also
 miss out on the advantages of shopping therapy, the costumer service, using all your senses to enjoy the things you want before actually buying it and the bonus of the weight you loss with all the walking and the muscle you build with all the carrying. In conclusion, online shopping is indeed very
convenient but
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convenient, but
also
 got its own disadvantages.
However we
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However, we
 wanna do our shopping, online shopping is looking very likely
as
Suggestion
at
 the thing in the future.

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