With the increasing number of people in cities most don't know their neighbours and the sense of community e is lost what is causing this how can we will turn it around

Of late growing number of people are unaware of their neighbours and losing the community. A
see
a division of an ocean or a large body of salt water partially enclosed by land
sea
change has been witnessed both the children and elders have
lack
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a lack
of social space in
locality
Suggestion
the locality
a locality
. The following paragraph would elucidate possible reasons for the problems and purpose a handful of remedial purpose. To commence with the reason,
First
and foremost busy life in
modern period
Suggestion
the modern period
. Due to hectic life they don't have
time
to interact with neighbours. Even they don't have
time
to spend with the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
themselves.
Also people
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Also, people
have different working shifts.
For instance
, some people work in night shift and some other people work in
day
the time after sunrise and before sunset while it is light outside
daytime
time
secondly
children don't have
time
to go outside and play with their
neighbours
Suggestion
neighbours'
children due to school timing and tuition timing. For the more individuals these days
relay
have confidence or faith in
rely
on technology so much they prefer to make
friend
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friends
a friend
on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
rather than neighbourhood. When they have free period they are busy on the social circle friends like Facebook, YouTube and so on
.
Accept space
.
Undoubtedly every lock has a key
similarly
some solution should be implemented like government play vital role to resolve
this
issue.
For
example construct
Accept comma addition
example, construct
park
Suggestion
a park
so people will be
go
Suggestion
going
outside and gather
together
Accept comma addition
together, then
then
parents can automatically talk to each other each other about their life matter.
Therefore children
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Therefore, children
would have spare
time
and they can play with
neighbours children
Suggestion
the neighbours' children
neighbours' children
last
but not the least
government
Suggestion
the government
can encourage retailers to build moles so people can make their shopping and
interact
Suggestion
interactions
interaction
with people To recapitulate, I would like to state that
buracracy
nonelective government officials
bureaucracy
should put their best foot forward to build parks and malls to improve the communication between neighbours.
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