Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a well known fact that
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crime
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the crime rate
rate
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has been falling day by day. Some people think that the
government
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should give the equal
punishment
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of every
crime
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, while some others believe that
government
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should give
punishment
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according to the
crime
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. I will discuss the both views and give my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, why some people think there should be
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given
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the fixed punishment
punishment
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for every
crime
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.
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and foremost point is
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a decrease
in
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rate
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. In
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the modern era
,
crime
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rate
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is increase
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is increasing
has increased
is increased
increases
very quickly, if the
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should give
punishment
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such
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as death penalty to the human who do any
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, with
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amount of
crime
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rate
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will decrease.
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, if the
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should not give equal
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to every criminal,
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the criminal
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does
twice that
crime
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because that time they do not any type of fear regarding to
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, so
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why the
government
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should give fixed
punishment
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to every criminal.
On the other hand
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, some people are against the fixed
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, giving for every
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, because sometimes the
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is very small, so it is not true to give a
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such
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as
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the death penalty
.
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, in these days most of the do
crime
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related to robbery and blackmailing because in the modern era, all the things are becoming more and more expensive. So most of the people do not have enough money to fulfil their needs with their salary
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why most people do that
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to earn money, if the
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increases their salary,
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crime
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will
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decrease and all the people live happily and healthily in their life. To conclude, in my opinion, both views have equal importance, but I think that
punishment
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should be given by according to the
crime
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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