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Some people think that museum should be an enjoyable places to attract and entertain young people. Others think the purpose of museum is educating not entertaining. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today in our society, people
likes
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like
 visiting places of interest either for pleasure or education of which a
museum
can not
can not
cannot
 be ruled out. Museums are created to preserve our reach societal heritage and landslide achievement in all
field
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fields
 of endeavour. Places of
such
 repute should not only be
interesting but
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interesting, but
also
entertaining so
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entertaining, so
 as to encourage people to visit it. In
this
 essay I will be discussing both sides and giving my opinion at the end. Interestingly, museums are built for the purpose of preserving history for the future generation.
This
 history can only be
access
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accessed
accessible
 if the place is made enjoyable by the people. The story of our cultural and historic transition contains landmark and heroic achievement by different great minds which are
place
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placed
 in
video documentary
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the video documentary
a video documentary
 in some museums.
This
 documentary can attract individuals who might be interested in them.
For example
, the video documentary in Benin
museum
 and cultural
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
 as so captivating to every
museum
 goer and many
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used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
even
even v
 wishes to attend on hearing
such
.
On the other hand
, a
museum
 should be
educating
Suggestion
educated
 in its activities and operation. Previously, museums are mainly visited by those either in discipline related to archaeological development or carrying out a research connected to it. They are made as safe haven for some historical and cultural monuments of great value to the people. For
this
 purpose, it is seen as areas only a limited few can access especially when you are
concern
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concerned
.
This
 value
on
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of
museum
 forms an orientation in mind of people was it is rich for study on historic and scientific achievement of all ages. Conclusively, a
museum though
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museum, though
enables
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is enabling
 for the preservation of historic breakthroughs in all areas, should not
be be
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
 limited to just education. It should
also
 be entertaining organization and activities so as it can
enginee
a person who uses scientific knowledge to solve practical problems
engineer
engine
 people's interest in its visitation thereby fully utilizing its purpose.
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