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Now a days parents are giving too much freedom to children. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Family is an institution, where parents play an imperative role in the upbringing of their
off-springs
the immediate descendants of a person
offsprings
offspring
off-spring
. There is a school of thought which believes that, children are getting more freedom than required these days. I completely assert with
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 statement and the same has been outlined as to why
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a
 negative trend in the subsequent paragraphs. Primarily, it is an irrefutable fact that parents act as an undying
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guide
 and always didactic in nature. Parents are
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 striving hard to keep their work-live balance and meet their financial aids,
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 has unknowingly created excessive freedom for the children, which is a worrying trend set to continue. To substantiate, it was reported in "The Times" magazine that more than 40 % of juvenile drug addicts are in that situation because of the lack of parental guidance. What is more, there is a fervent conviction that if children are let free, it adds up to their
inquistiveness
a state of active curiosity
inquisitiveness
 and in turn helps them to learn things rapidly as it is believed that life is the best teacher.
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, striplings might lack life skills and oblivious of what is right and what is wrong.
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 can be easily encountered with the appropriate advise of the parents. In conclusion,
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the process of using your mind to consider something carefully
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 and I believe parents pay an indispensable role in moulding the child's future

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