Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

Man, through the ages, has undergone changes from the time when they lived in caves and hunting animal to current day they live in high tech apartments. During the all ages, people had to
work
hardly until today.
However
, some rules and situation are changed. Nowadays, many people have to
work
until the midnight or goring aboard. From the one side, spending more hours
to
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working
work
brings some benefit for both worker and employer.
Firstly
, we live in the competing world, for winning we should try
hard
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harder
. If an employee
work
hard and stay overtime, at the end of the month, he or she
gain
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gains
more money.
This
surplus money can spend for her or his family.
Besides
,
employer
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an employer
can complete their project sooner as they expect, so they win their competition.
Moreover
, travel to another place give us
this
chance to meet some new people and gain some information about
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture. From the other side, spending more hours of day at
workplace
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the workplace
has some disadvantages. For beginning, every person has a lot of stress
at
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in
her or his
work
.
Consequently
, stay more means more stress.
Secondly
, it creates a distance between members of a family.
For example
, my father used to
work
a lot even in
weekend
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weekends
a weekend
. He lost a lot of family gathering
such
as
birthday party
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birthday parties
a birthday party
or weekend barbeque.
At
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As
result
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a result
, someday he felt he got
depression
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depressed
.
Finally
,
this
matter is very harmful
for
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to
people’s health. As I my experience, we should create a balance between both aspects of our
live
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lives
life
. We should manage our working hours and hours that we spend at home.
For example
, we can try to spend all weekend with our family.
Besides
, we can
work
until a specific
hours
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hour
like seven or eight in the evening. To sum up, open the all advantages, I believe
this
matter has more disadvantages. In my opinion, personal life is very important than
work
life. Some meaning like being happy, healthy and so on is very valuable
for
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to
the humans.

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