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Most people agree that money cannot be happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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Wealth and joyfulness are paramount in
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’s life.
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, there has been a debate among the majority of people that riches do not equate cheerfulness. The reasons why
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 is tough to interpret, and how people could achieve it would be discussed.
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,
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 of the reasons why it is arduous to depict
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 is that it cannot be quantified.
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, being joyous cannot be measured or numerically attached because it is determined and controlled by
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’s emotion. Another reason why it is hard to define joyfulness is that it is unpredictable. People’s expectation are sometimes not met, and a result of
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, people’s reaction or response to
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 situation makes it difficult to define
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.
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, my wife currently works as a class teacher in
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 of the Nursery Schools with a good salary, but she’s not happy because her expectation was that she would get a job, even if it is with a lesser salary than teaching, as a make-up artist with
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 of the cosmetology companies.
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, there are various ways in which people can attain a state of being happy.
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 of these major ways is self-contentment. Being satisfied with whatever
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 has, has proven to be effective in gaining
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. Another way to earn
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 is by doing or following
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’s heart desires. It is believed by some persons that passion birth
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.
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,
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 could derive joy from doing something passionately. To illustrate, a research conducted by the World Health Organization in the year 2018 showed that Doctors in the Eastern part of Africa are happy with the nature of their job despite the fact that they are being underpaid. In conclusion, while the major reasons why joyfulness is hard to define is that it cannot be quantified, and it cannot be predictable, self-contentment and following
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’s heart desires are factors people could use to earn a state of being happy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • universally
  • cultural differences
  • psychological factors
  • satisfaction with life
  • emotional balance
  • personal achievements
  • social connections
  • fulfilling relationships
  • sense of belonging
  • sense of purpose
  • physical health
  • well-being
  • financial stability
  • mindfulness
  • gratitude
  • positive thinking
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