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Some people prefer to work for a large company, Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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Nowadays, there are many different
companies
, some of them small and others big.
Although
 some people prefer to
work
 in big
companies
, others do not. In my opinion, I prefer to
work
 in a big
company
, in
this
 essay I will explain the reasons for my choice. Working in a big
company
 has its advantages.
Firstly
, big
companies
 provide their employees with professional development that
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
show examples
 them to improve and gain new skills,
for instance
, big
companies
 hold many workshops that give training to employees and
also
 bring famous trainers to conduct these courses,
furthermore
, some big
companies
 or big schools make summer courses and workshops during vacation like GEMS international school. The second reason to
work
 in a big
company
 is the better
benefits
 they offer, as nowadays everything costs a lot amount of money,
as a
result
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result,
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 everyone now looks for better
benefits
 like a better salary and medical insurance,
moreover
, these
benefits
 will lead to a better lifestyle.
Finally
, when a person works in a big
company
 he gains a lot of skills and a valuable experience certificate,
for example
, the employee who works for TOYOTA
company
 can
work
 in any other car
company
 because of the skills he gains from working with
this
 big
company
. In conclusion,
while
 some people prefer to
work
 for a small
company
, I prefer to
work
 for a big one because of gaining professional development lectures, more
benefits
 and experience letter.
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Conclusion
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Examples
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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