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Band 6.5

Some people think that it should be compulsory for people to retake their driving test every 5 years. What are the advantages and disavantages of doing this?

In many
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, it is widely agreed that drivers should renew their driving
licence
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 after five years
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 one has been granted.
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practice
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 may present benefits
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 implies many costs associated with it. What is more, regarding the range of age of the users, in some
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 requirement lowers when people go over their seventies. In my point of view, despite some disadvantages, it is wise to set
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 requirement in order to keep the accident records low. To start with the advantages, I consider that well-educated drivers derive a lower rate of incidents, taking into account the exponential amount of cars that are actually running on the streets. What is more, the fact of having to pass a strict exam, deters incompetent users from presenting them to set the test without the right forehead preparation.
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, many
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 apply for their exams international
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, from what the international community benefits as a whole as well, regarding safety issues.
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, the requirement applied in many lands of renewing the driving
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 once you are seventy, having
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 medical exams.
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, in many
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,
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 may imply many disadvantages. One of them may be that the
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 cards are not digitally organised, so, the cost of printing them every five years is huge and when the materials needed are not available on the market, could reflect in scarcity of permisses. Another con is that many governments may use
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 only to enhance their revenues, rather than focusing on setting high
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 for drivers, which has a low impact in terms of vehicular incidents. In conclusion, despite the obligation of renewing driving licences every five years is not a regular worldwide
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 and may differ among
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, I consider that setting minimum driving
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 and health requirements
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 a must when applying public policies in order to maintain a minimum of accidents.
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, despite some disadvantages described above, from my point of view, laws that promote high-quality
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 for getting a driving
licence
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 are fully recommended.

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task achievement
Ensure that all main points are backed up with specific details or examples. For instance, the essay could benefit from more concrete examples related to the costs of re-testing drivers.
coherence cohesion
Some paragraphs could flow more smoothly. Consider using transition words and phrases to reinforce the connections between ideas and ensure seamless progression through each point.
task achievement
The essay does a good job of presenting a well-rounded view of both the advantages and disadvantages of retaking driving tests every five years.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively outlining and summarizing the main points discussed.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • driving test
  • road safety
  • traffic laws
  • driving regulations
  • refresh
  • skills
  • unfit drivers
  • economic burden
  • logistical challenges
  • inconvenience
  • public discontent
  • accelerate
  • road conditions
  • test appointment
  • deteriorated
  • practicing driving
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