Many museums and historical sites are visited by tourist people and not by local people. Why is this case? What should be done to attract local people to this museums and historical sites.

Historical sites and museums reflects the ancient times.
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
outsiders are more interested in visiting
such
sites than local people. There can be many reasons. According to my opinion, community people should
visit
such
places, but due to negligence and lack of importance of
this
ancient
places
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place
they avoid visiting
such
places. In the following paragraph, I intend to discuss the main reason about it.
Firstly
, indigenous people are already aware about places of history and the things presented in the museums. Due to
this
importance regarding
such
places decreases and they neglect the need to
visit
the buildings.
Moreover
, everyone is more interested in exploring the other cultures rather than knowing their own traditional culture. So the tourist from the different countries are
more keen
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keener
to know about
foundation
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the foundation
of
this places
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this place
these places
and local people travel to their countries. To overcome
such
issues,
government
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the government
should play an ideal role to upgrade the true culture and precious art and architecture of their own country, which will encourage global as well as national people. To add to it, they should organize events and exhibitions which will attract the people to
visit
and spread the significance about it.
For example
, during Republic day lighting shows, different styles of dance programs and many more are organized by
government
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the government
near India Gate to influence people and showing tribute to the soldiers and telling people about the
sacrifies
endure the loss of
sacrifices
sacrifice
they have made for them. To conclude, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that it becomes
moral duty
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a moral duty
of the local people and government to
visit
their own traditional places as well as influence the others to do the same and to equally maintain
such
places.
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