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Nowadays in many countries women have full-time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 current era, it has become common that women have full
time
 jobs in many regions.
Therefore
, it is very logical that men should be responsible enough to share household
work
 evenly.
Otherwise
, it would be really hard to manage everything together
by
Suggestion
with
 one hand.
However
,
this
 essay will state in support of managing household
work
 together with supportive example. In my opinion, I complete agree with the point of dividing daily homely
work
 between men and women to balance every situation which is not only develop a healthy relation but
also
 increases the respect for each other. Let's take a view of some of the
supportive
Suggestion
supporting
 points.
Firstly
, for any nuclear family, cooking, dusting or mopping takes
time
 to complete and
also
 due to tight
work
 schedule women are unable to extract
time
 for
such
 job. Here, men's responsibility arrives to assist her. For an example, for
married
Suggestion
a married
 couple working ladies are not capable enough to take care of all
task
Suggestion
tasks
 alone. Sometimes,
husband
Suggestion
the husband
a husband
 should take the equal responsibility. In other hand, few people never believe that it must be shared
work
 as to them women are only responsible person to take care of
work
 life as well as household
work
.
Although
, few exceptional cases are there when women look after both
life
Suggestion
lives
 together and balance unquestionably amazing way.
Hence
, in short, it is always recommended to understand your partner and help him or her to make your life-partner comfortable. In conclusion,
it
it is
it's
 not so surprising that women can have full
time
 jobs.
Therefore
, men would be there to feel her boundaries and aid her in various ways.
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