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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Nowadays, more and more people argued that
money
 should be spent on railways rather than roads by governments. From my viewpoints, there are a lot of benefits to develop railways in most countries,
however
, I do not completely agree with that view. Overall, how
money
 spent
in
Suggestion
on
 public transportation is based on situation we really faced.
Firstly
, I do not deny the railways hugely save people time and
money
 in modern society, especially, the importance of railways is obvious when we need to travel from one place to another remote place.
At
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In
 the meantime, with the development of railways, many poor
urbans
relating to or concerned with a city or densely populated area
urban
orphans
 where is lack of resources like coal and oil in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 country were improved through rail
transport
.
For example
, the water was
transport
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transported
 from the east to the west in china, it dramatically changes the drought in the west of china, and give local people a better life than before. But, is it more significant than road? The answer is no from my
understand
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understanding
. In fact, the percentage of roads used is more than railways used. With the exception of the long-distance
transport
 on roads, the roads of central of
city
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the city
 make shopping and walking very convenient.
On the other hand
, if the ground of road is poor, we cannot enjoy the modern life wherever we go in the city, let alone taking by rails. In some rural of
country
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the country
, there
are
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is
 huge room to be improved, as the situation of road is uneven, which lead to people cannot go out conveniently and reduce the feeling of happiness, these roads of areas should be
reconstruct
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reconstructed
 rapidly.
For example
, in some areas of china, it is unbelievable that people
transport
 stuffs by horse. Government should pay more
money
 on these areas and improve their life at the meanwhile. To sum up, the railways and roads
is
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are
 both important for people, but the development of roads is more significant for poor areas, so I
maitain
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
 the
money
 should be spent on roads by government.
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