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Science and technology have improved the standards of living in all over the world. Some people claim that the role of the arts has become insignificant. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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science
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
Science
 and technology have much
effects
Suggestion
effect
 on living styles in the whole world today.
some
Suggestion
Some
 people are so
imprresed
deeply or markedly affected or influenced
impressed
 that they claim frankly and
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believes
believe
 that arts has no more role in how the people live.
this
Suggestion
This
 essay will discuss that how
scinece
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
 and technology has transformed the living
standereds
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standards
standard
 of people and now the arts role is neglected.
new era
Suggestion
A new era
New era
The new era
 has now improved far beyond the early time.
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
Technolgy
 has
comletely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 changed the ways people living and the things they are using for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 routine life.
now
Suggestion
Now
 a days it is so
easier
Suggestion
easy
 to connect people within seconds as compared to early ancient eras.
for
Suggestion
For
exmple we
Accept comma addition
example, we
example we
 can contact our
classs
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
class
classes
Calais
 fellows
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 seconds and can inform them about the situations going on in our
class rooms
a room in a school where lessons take place
classrooms
 and can ask for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 health and they can be informed of our status.
while
Suggestion
While
 in the other hands there are people they still support arts which are very
lesss
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
less
 in number.
in
Suggestion
In
 conclusion science and
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
has completely replace
Suggestion
has completely replaced
 arts and people are
enjoyiin
derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in
enjoying
 the fruits of technology.
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