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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replace them. However, others do not agree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

#people #libraries #waste #resources #money #computers
Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
 of
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 use technology regularly
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 for searching some
information
instead
 of opening a book even for reading at free
time
. There are many reasons for
this
.
Firstly
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Firstly, as
as a result
 number of people's using internet are decreasing every day because the facility and rapidity offerings
by
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with
 internet.
In
addition life
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addition, life
 becomes
more easier
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easier
 than before where it was
need
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needed
large number
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large numbers
a large number
 of books to search and confirm any
information
.
Furthermore technology
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Furthermore, technology
 offers communication across the world and can treat any questions are confusing about without loosing money or wasting
time
 with gaining
information
 in detail and everywhere.
On the other hand
, library have a
sharm
attractiveness that interests or pleases or stimulates
charm
showroom
some
 with large space and huge quantities of books with full knowledge and
culture
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culture, however
however
 the
time
 it needs to finish the research and upload
information
 from many resources and writers. Whereas searching in books and reading need enough
time
 and money still it will
stays
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stay
 the
first
 means of knowledge with ability of looking many
resource
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resources
 and spending nice
time
 on the library's tables.
Lastly
 world is going to be more evolved in a broader
way i
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way, I
way I
 argue that's what crucial is that keeping books best reliable ways for knowledge with keep using
internet
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the internet
 in correct ways.
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  • cultural hub
  • community engagement
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • sustainable
  • affordability
  • technological advancement
  • information retrieval
  • hybrid resources
  • social interaction
  • evolution of libraries
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  • access to information
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