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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of the following media; books, radios and televisions for communicating information.

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Nowadays, media has become a well-established part of life for humans. Various types of media
such
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 as books, radios and televisions are used to communicate information in society. In my opinion, they have positive and negative impacts on people.
First
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 and foremost, books are very familiar to us since we
were childhood
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were in childhood
. Books
such
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 as newspaper and magazine can give us
facts
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the facts
 about what is happening around the world.Reading a book can eliminate stress for
awhile
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a while
.
However
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, some people consider it as boring.
Besides
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, buying books isn't cheap.
Seondly
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, radio is one of the
media which
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media, which
 covers huge population and it will benefit
to
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for
 people who like to listen information on their way to home or work. News will be timely delivered to audiences and radio channels vary from region to region, so people can listen in their language.
On the other hand
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, it is only an audio medium and we need to adjust
frequency
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the frequency
 properly or unless we cannot listen clearly.
Last
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 but not least, television is a modern communicating tool used to get information and people can hear and see
differernt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 messages from TV. By watching it, we are kept informed and up-to-date with breaking news.Despite
this
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, it might be addictive and ruin your social life. To sum up, it is undoubtedly true that
media
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the media
 has its own pros and cons and we should utilize these media in the right way
instead
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 of abusing it.
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