Some people believed that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that education is i

ndispensible

not to be dispensed with; essential

indispensable

for children to accommodate with the fast paced of modern life. To a certain extent I disagree with the idea that educational curriculum should leave the arts subjects

such

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as painting and

music

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, I accept that they need to acknowledge practical subjects

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as information

technology

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. Learning information

technology

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in the

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chool’s

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school

education can bring a new advancement for a

country

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. It allows children to broaden their knowledge about the

technology

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tools

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as computer which could encourage them to research and d

eveloping

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development

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sector.

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, in Finland, children learn software developing in

school

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which helps to invent c

onvenient computer application

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a convenient computer application

for them.

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could be a progress for a

country

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to advance in the contemporary world.

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, studying information

technology

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is a way to organize young learners for the developed world.

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, I would argue that painting and

music

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should not be eliminated from the syllabus to increase children’s focus on the above mentioned subject. Excluding these subjects can effect on both cultures and economy of a

country

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could be a deterrent for the children to practice their traditional

music

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which keep them unaware about their cultures.

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, they might forget own cultural

music

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and tend to adopt other cultures which pose a significant cultural threat f

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from

country

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. A recent survey shows that in Bangladesh 20% young people are naive about their folk

music

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because they have not p

ractice

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practiced

it in

school

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, we would have suffered f

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from

the need of artists in paintings, and

this

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could prohibit us to arrange any international exhibitions

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, there are few foreign visitors will be interested to travel the

country

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, and losing the income from

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sector. In conclusion, though learning scientific subjects at

school

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poses essential competency for the children to manage the modern world, I believe that paintings and

music

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should not be removed from the

school

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curriculum f

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these subjects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

325 words

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Some people believed that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that children should be raised by all family members like grandparents, uncles and aunts and not just parents. Discuss both side and give your opinion?

In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

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You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home happened, which means that you must change the date of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • explain the important event • apologize for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?