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Some schools include art in their curriculum to develop creativity of their students. Is it a right approach? Can it have any downsides?

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Though
modern educational system
Suggestion
the modern educational system
 is concentrated on
sciences
Suggestion
the sciences
 and technology, there are still efforts to run
art
 classes at some schools.
Art
 as a component of
school curriculum
Suggestion
the school curriculum
 is not conceived undoubtedly. There are many debates whether the creativity it evokes in students is measurable with the costs, a school budget spends on it. People often underestimate the things, which do not bring primary results.
This
 is the case with the presence of
art
 subjects at schools. Modern society, mostly having utilitarian approach, questions the practical benefits of
art
 learning. While, the latter can indeed help students in different aspects of their life and
carreer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
. Learning painting does not necessarily mean to become a painter. It develops a skill, which can be implemented in other spheres,
such
 as architecture, advertisement industry, engineering, to name but a few. Admittedly,
inclusion
Suggestion
the inclusion
 of
art
 in school programs is an important step.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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