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Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. However it is becoming apparent that in countries such as the USA and Australia, illiteracy is on the increase.

Illiteracy
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 has not been a problem for most
western
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countries
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 ever since the spread of the public
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 system. It has traditionally been viewed as a problem for
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 with limited resources to create a competent
education
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 system.
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, in recent years,
illiteracy
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 has been rising in developed
countries
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such
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 as the United States and Australia. The following essay will examine some plausible causes,
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 as lack of funding and
rise
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 of poverty, and discuss some of its possible consequences on society. One possible explanation for the rise of
illiteracy
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 is the lack of funding. Without proper funding, it is impossible to give every
students
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 a competent
education
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. It is known that in some parts of the US, educational systems are underfunded. If schools do not have enough resources to properly educate every student, the quality of
education
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 students receive will be dramatically decreased. Another possible explanation
if
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 the rise of poverty in cities. Some parents simply do not have the financial means to support a child through school. Many kids who
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 from
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impoverished background often end up with
low paying
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 jobs and addiction
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 and often forgets about even the most essential materials,
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 as reading and writing at a competent level. Of course,
illiteracy
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 is a serious threat
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 society. It significantly decreases the productivity of those who are affected. Those who are illiterate cannot
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high skilled
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 jobs.
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, it would be impossible for someone who's illiterate to be promoted to a management position since those positions require an advanced level of comprehension. In conclusion, an increase
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illiteracy
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 poses a big threat
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 the
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 involved. If
this
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 trend is not reversed, the situation can become very serious.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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