Many people believe that social networking sites (such as fb) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

It is an undeniable fact that social media has changed our
society
immensely. It is often thought by many people that it has spoiled many individuals and have had a detrimental effect on
society
. I totally agree with
this
viewpoint and following are some of the reasons why I believe so.
Firstly
, I believe that the excessive use of social networking sites wastes one’s precious
time
. People these days, especially, the younger generation,
prefer
Suggestion
prefers
using social media and they do not realize how it robs them of their valuable
time
.
For example
, youngsters spend hours and hours on Facebook watching videos and images most of which are not useful.
Furthermore
, they get involved with people whom they do not even know and prefer spending
time
chatting with them, the
time
which they should be utilizing on study and career.
Secondly
, the effect that social
media especially
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media, especially
Facebook has had on a
society
is
also
detrimental. Before the development of technology people used to sit together and value their families and friends by having face to face contact with them.
However
, most of the people nowadays prefer communicating through social media, which unfortunately cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the true essence of family meet ups and friends get together. While
this
has not only led to disharmony in the
society but
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society, but
has
also
increased the feeling of loneliness among people. To conclude, despite a tremendous development in the social networking sites, they have had an overall negative effect on both the individuals and
society
. They have deprived people of the idea of true relationship and have left our youngsters on the verge of failure.
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