"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

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Today's
modern world
,
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,
development of
life
science and technology play important role in human
life
by treating and rescue them from most deadly diseases.
However
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,
the same
time
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timely
arrival of new
life
threatning
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
bio organisms gives us
challenges though
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challenges, though
we are more
concious
intentionally conceived
conscious
about that. So, researching and treating diseases only will not be a solution for healthy
life bur
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life, bur
we should prevent it
befere
earlier in time; previously
before
bigger
buffer
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In addition
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government
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the government
has to invest huge amount of money for research
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,
instesd
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
we can invest less
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feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
to take some preventive measures.
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let's
see how government
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is investing
has been investing
has invested
was investing
too much on research with
an
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a
perfect example. Novel corona virus
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the most dangerous viruses scientist has found
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in the recent past
recently
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an
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patients, those
who were all affected
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by
that particular
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virus
verse
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they need to take utmost care about oxygen supply
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food
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medicine
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electricity and wage to doctors.Though
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they are spending too
much but
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much, but
still
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Research people
not yet found
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haven't yet found
the way to eradicate that particular Noval corona
viruse
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virus
viruses
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of acting now
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create
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created
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having knowledge of
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in the middle of
among
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regard something as probable or likely
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animal's
animals'
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likely but not certain to be or become true or real
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of
this
virus. In conclusion
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being smart is better than novel invention.Our lives are more precious
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so we must pay more attention to preventive measures
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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