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Some people say that main environmental problem of our time is loss of plants and animals. Other day that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Opinions are divided whether pivotal environmental problem is endangered species of plants and animals or other issues.
some
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Some
 people opine that extinct animals and plants have more of
averse
contrary to your interests or welfare
adverse
 effect on
ecology
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the ecology
. On the flip side some
argues
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argue
 that paramount
worrimentes
the statement (oral or written) of an exchange of promises
agreements
 are
overpopulation
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overpopulated
, global warming
etcetra
. Here, in
this
 essay will
endulge
give free rein to
indulge
 on both the point
To begin
 with, without a shadow of doubt it is true that due to human activities many wildlife
have
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has
 to suffer. Among them few are already
vanished
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vanishing
 and the others are
at
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on
 the edge of it.
Repercussions
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The repercussions
 of
that is
 natural cycle got imbalanced. Many
diseases
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disease
 causing pathogens appeared which was not there before few years. Because of
this
, many life - threatening epidemic as well as endemic misery occurred which coast fortune to mankind. On the other side, complications like overpopulation, global warming, waste disposal have
major concern
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major concerns
a major concern
. There are not so welcoming change happened in climate for an instance too hot or too cold due to that tsunami, hurricane and other natural calamities frequency accelerated. The ice
on
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in
 the Antarctic is melting at jet speed which have
direct relationship
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a direct relationship
 with
increasing sea water level
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the increasing sea water level
an increasing sea water level
. Not only that, overpopulation is one condition that no one can ignore. Agriculture land is getting converted into industrial plants. Deforestation,
incernation
a new personification of a familiar idea
incarnation
 of waste as there are not enough land to dispose. These all have
direct effect
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a direct effect
 on human being and
earth
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the earth
. After taking consideration of above mention views and examples it can be recapitulate that
,
Accept space
,
every problem has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
deterious
harmful to living things
deleterious
 effect. Here
,
Accept space
,
 as far as my view is concerned, I postulate that other environmental factors have more crucial hazards that are directly affecting the ecosystem and causing major health issues.
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