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There seems to be an increasing trend towards assessing students through exams rather than continual assessment. What are the advantages and disadvantages of exams as a form of assessment

#trend #students #exams #form
The line graph illustrates the percentage of the various proportion of
age
 groups look for different factors in terms of importance during purchasing a new home. It is evident from the graph, between the
age
 group of 25 to 34, schools are the
second
-highest preferred factor as compared to other factors
such
 as parks, shopping facilities, and public
transport
 which
is given
Suggestion
gives
 less preference. Moving
further
, schools are becoming less desirable when people are moving over 44 and decreased sharply till the
age
 of 64.
Similarly
, Shopping Facilities, Parks and public
transport
 increased gradually over 35 and favoured more by the
age
 group of people over 55.
Also
, it is clear that the low crime rate is the most important factor between all
age
 groups.
On the other hand
, schools are around 55% and public
transport
 is only given 5% of importance
for
Suggestion
in
 the
age
 group of 25 to 34.
Moreover
, for an older person over 55, Shopping facilities, which is around 35% the
second
 most important factor, followed by crime rate approximately 80% and public
transport
 is only 20% least among all factors.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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