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More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities to look for work. What will be the consequences of this?

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A lot of people are being shifted to urban areas from the rural part and turning their back towards farming, in order to look for
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 occupation to earn the bread and butter
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currently
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Currently
, it has become a major issue that we need to ponder about
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 Nowadays,
majority
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the majority
 of the population is moving to the metro cities or towns and leaving their village
life
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 behind in search of a better
life
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; good education, health care, and to enrich their standard of living
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 it is true to some extent that
city
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the city
 provides you an easier
life
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 style yet there are many struggles that comes with it
too which
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too, which
 includes the situation of population explosion
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 meaning thereby is higher population density rate
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in
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In
 addition to that, the other problem
that is
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 common to witness in
such
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 scenario is of pollution followed by a rapid hike in
number
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the number
 of people falling sick and an immense increase in crime rates as well.
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, these problems can be reduced by facilitating people with technological education and by developing the village area in terms of providing
the better
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the best
better
 education, safety and health care. People should be aware of the new agricultural technical inventions, so that they can get rid of the monotonous conventional pattern of cultivation. To conclude, most people think that relocating to cities guarantees you a better job and uplifts your living-
standard but
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standard, but
on the contrary
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 it is a difficult task to survive in the city
life
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 if you are not prepared for dark side of it
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In order to develop a nation and enjoy the perks of both worlds of rural as well as urban
life
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it is crucial to maintain a balance between both.

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