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Nowadays many children are playing computer games instead of doing sports activities. Why is it happening? Is it a negative or positive development?

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Sports are replaced by online games and multimedia devices in
modern era
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the modern era
. No child is going out and doing some physical activity.
This
 essay opines that its completely a negative development because it brings many disorders and huge impact on children’s mental and physical growth.
This
 essay will discuss the effects and impacts of
computer
 gaming on younger brains.
To begin
 with, due to dramatic change in technology ever since
19th century it
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the 19th century, it
the 19th century it
 has made possible that, a person can play any game which he can feel to play, and at his comfort without moving physically, confining to
a
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an
idle
conforming to an ultimate standard of perfection or excellence; embodying an ideal
ideal
 place with the help of
computer
 and digital tablets where they can download millions of games, but as they are kids they wouldn’t know what changes that kind of games would bring them in
future
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the future
.
This
 is happening just because of lack of awareness of physical games and
benefits
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the benefits
 of it. Other reasons could be busy parents who cannot able to spend time for their kids to play
in
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at
 leisure or go out with
kid
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the kid
kids
a kid
.
For instance
, one of my neighbour family always insists their kid to play digital online games as they could work peacefully without their kids disturbance.
Although
computer
 games and streaming sites
has
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have
 some benefits
such
 as intellectual behaviour development, one can have these benefits only when they can limit themselves to it. But
,
Accept space
,
 physical sports activities
has
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have
 many benefits when compared to
computer
 games, one can learn what could a team work would help with and keeps body tone maintains a healthy life and physique if they continue them for the rest of their age In conclusion,
although
computer
 games are at times acceptable, they need to be limited and sports activities
needs
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need
 to be encouraged all the time when leisure period is available, parents
needs
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need
 to make kids aware of what a physical sport can make them
achieve
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achievable
 and should monitor them while they are on computers or mobile devices.

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