the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The City hospital in the southern
side
of
Ring
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the Ring
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road
which
also
can be reached for it by
city
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the city
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road
and take the Hospital
road
. In 2007 the roads
lead
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leading
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to
hospital
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the hospital
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was
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were
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different
in
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from
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what
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those
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in 2010. In 2010 the
road
was so feasible and easier,
due to
the bus station become
nearly
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near
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to
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apply
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the main gate of the hospital and extra parking was added only for
public
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a public
the public
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car
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cars
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with the door
reach
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reaching
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to hospital from the east
side
. From
south
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the south
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side
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,side
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the two roundabouts were added to reduce the traffic from the City
road
which
also
help
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helps
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the bus station and staff car
park
. There
additional
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is additional
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park
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parking
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only for
public
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the public
a public
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car
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cars
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which an extra
park
helps to provide more space for
client
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clients
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and staff. I think the features help the patient who is using the bus for transport to reach the main gate
easy
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easily
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, especially the old-patient and the
additonal
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additional
gate from the public
park
side
will help in emergency situations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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