the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The City hospital in the southern
side
of Ring
Correct article usage
the Ring
road
which also
can be reached for it by city
Correct article usage
the city
road
and take the Hospital road
. In 2007 the roads lead
to Wrong verb form
leading
hospital
Add an article
the hospital
was
different Correct subject-verb agreement
were
in
Change preposition
from
what
in 2010. In 2010 the Correct pronoun usage
those
road
was so feasible and easier, due to
the bus station become nearly
Change the word
near
to
the main gate of the hospital and extra parking was added only for Change preposition
apply
public
Add an article
a public
the public
car
with the door Fix the agreement mistake
cars
reach
to hospital from the east Wrong verb form
reaching
side
. From south
Add an article
the south
side
the two roundabouts were added to reduce the traffic from the City Add a comma
,side
road
which also
help
the bus station and staff car Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
park
. There additional
Add a missing verb
is additional
park
only for Replace the word
parking
public
Add an article
the public
a public
car
which an extra Fix the agreement mistake
cars
park
helps to provide more space for client
and staff. I think the features help the patient who is using the bus for transport to reach the main gate Fix the agreement mistake
clients
easy
, especially the old-patient and the Change the word
easily
additonal
gate from the public Correct your spelling
additional
park
side
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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