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Band 4

the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
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The City hospital in the southern
side
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 of
Ring
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the Ring
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road
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 which
also
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 can be reached for it by
city
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the city
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road
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 and take the Hospital
road
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. In 2007 the roads
lead
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leading
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 to
hospital
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the hospital
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was
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were
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 different
in
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from
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what
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those
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 in 2010. In 2010 the
road
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 was so feasible and easier,
due to
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 the bus station become
nearly
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near
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to
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apply
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the main gate of the hospital and extra parking was added only for
public
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a public
the public
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car
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cars
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 with the door
reach
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reaching
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 to hospital from the east
side
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. From
south
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the south
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side
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,side
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 the two roundabouts were added to reduce the traffic from the City
road
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 which
also
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help
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helps
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 the bus station and staff car
park
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. There
additional
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is additional
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park
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parking
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 only for
public
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the public
a public
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car
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cars
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 which an extra
park
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 helps to provide more space for
client
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clients
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 and staff. I think the features help the patient who is using the bus for transport to reach the main gate
easy
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easily
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, especially the old-patient and the
additonal
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additional
 gate from the public
park
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side
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 will help in emergency situations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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