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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the idea of wildlife being kept in zoos has been extensively debated. Some believe that animals are not meant to be held captive, while others argue that zoos play an important role in wildlife preservation.
This
 essay will discuss both views,
although
 I agree with the former.
Firstly
, no complex being can thrive in captivity. Especially wild animals have complex social interactions with each other and their ecosystems and cannot adapt to man-made environments. I personally agree with
this
 point of view because I strongly believe that animals are not objects that we can use for entertainment purposes, even if we provide some food and shelter.
For instance
, most animals refuse to mate in captivity because they lack the natural conditions in which they conduct their mating rituals,
such
 as the possibility to choose from multiple partners.
On the other hand
, some people find zoos useful for their role in promoting awareness towards the preservation of endangered species.
However
, their extinction is caused by the actions of humans,
such
 as extensive hunting, poaching, deforestation or pollution. Advances in medicine and technology have enabled people to help some species not to become extinct, but most animals that are bred in captivity cannot survive in natural conditions. A viable alternative to zoos is,
for example
, natural parks where we can help animals without interfering so much in their lives. In conclusion, I believe that zoos are becoming obsolete and that people should change their attitude towards wildlife and not keep animals in zoos.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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