Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem

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The crime rates are increasing all over the world. It is found that most of the criminals tend to commit more crimes after completing the

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punishment.

This

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essay will try to find the reason of

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behaviour and give some possible solutions to take care of

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issue.

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Firstly there

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Firstly, there

are many types of criminal activities. So

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we need to understand and find out the type of criminals who are repeating their crimes.

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Secondly we

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Secondly, we

need to check that while repeating are they doing the same or different type if crime. A study by BBC surprisingly shows that

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time offenders are repeating their

crimes but

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crimes, but

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time they are taking help of someone they met in prison. Perhaps while doing their sentence

inside

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the

prison they

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prison, they

are making friends with other offenders. They are becoming a part of the group.

Eventually after

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Eventually, after

getting released they meet each other and plan something new.

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one more cause for them to go again into the group is because the society doesn'

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accept them. They don'

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get good jobs and they don'

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get

good

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better

treatment from the society. To solve

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issue we need to make them understand the gravity of criminal acts. We need to make them feel that they have done a wrong deed. But before that if we could try to understand the reason behind them committing

being one more than one

two

crimes we could give a more concrete solution. Sometimes it is because of some psychological problem with the criminal and

some times

on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

it is because of their need. If it is a problem with their

mind we

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mind, we

need to take them to a doctor and get it treated so they don'

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commit the harmful act again. If the problem is because of their need, like

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if a poor guy is stealing money we need to help him to get a job so that he doesn'

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feel the need to repeat it again. To conclude the most important thing is understanding the mind of the person. We need to understand the reason behind their acts. Only

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can we take measures to stop

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repeatition

an event that repeats

repetition

repetitions

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

360 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

recidivism
rehabilitation programs
social stigma
ex-convicts
reintegration
support systems
mental health issues
addiction problems
criminal networks
incarceration

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