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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Topic about genetic engineering is very sensitive these years and the reason for
that is
this
technology
 shows great potential as well as threatening to the whole world. While I can’t deny it has brought us many benefits but I believe that we have to be very careful to
use
this
 two-edged sword or we may bring catastrophe to the whole world. On the one hand, human has used some method
from
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for
this
 field to solve
food issue
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the food issue
 and
medical problem
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a medical problem
medical problems
. From theory to practice, we have developed plenty of
food
 which contains abundant nutrition or can grow in extreme environment.
As a result
, human has suffered less from famine.
Besides
, the medical industry benefits a lot
from
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of
this
technology
. Scientist can
use
 genetic engineering to produce vaccines and parents can correct a genetic defect before baby is born. The whole history of
this
technology
 shows us
it
it is
it's
 just like a magic wood and if we
use
 it viciously, what could happen? The negative implications of genetic engineering abuse are mainly manifested in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
 and artificial super virus. Some scientists argue that genetically modified
food
 may cause diseases to
human body
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the human body
, and we can't guarantee that the plants we developed are safe into the
food
 chain because it may damage the whole ecosystems. What's worse, there were news said some mad scientists re-created deadly virus's DNA in the lab and
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 perilous if the virus was leaked out.
Biological
Suggestion
Biology
 is deadly when we
use
 it inappropriately. As far as I'm concerned, we should be very careful to
use
this
technology
 and if we
use
 it un-morally, it will be a
pandora's
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Pandora's
 box.
the
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The
 implications of
such
 practices would be unprecedented To sum up, there is no doubt that
this
 science does create many beautiful things for human.
However
, if we
use
this
technology
 to play god, we may bring the devil to the whole world. So, when we
use
 it to create or change something, think about the consequence seriously.
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