It is common aspiration among many young people to run their own business rather than work for an employer. Do you think the disadvantages of working for yourself outweigh the advantages ?

Mostly
yound
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
people think that working as an
employe
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employees
employer
is a little bit difficult, as compared to their own business. Because they thought that in employment there are restrictions and
also
followed by the rules. So they prefer to
work
on their own. They think
their
in or at that place
there
is
boss
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a boss
and many other people who ordered them to do
work
in office or field
work
but for some wrong there is much punishment. But if we look at a business started by their own hard
work
, there are
alot
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a lot
of benefits.
Main difference
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The main difference
is that in our own
business we
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business, we
are not forced by someone. We have to
work
for our own and there
is
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are
no time restrictions.
Advantages
Suggestion
The advantages
outweigh disadvantages in
this
condition.

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  • aspiration
  • entrepreneur
  • flexibility
  • decision-making
  • financial rewards
  • personal fulfillment
  • challenges
  • financial risk
  • invested capital
  • cash flow
  • guaranteed income
  • work-life balance
  • responsibility
  • pressure
  • burnout
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