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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computer should replace them. Howevee, others do not agree. Discuss both aides and give your opinion.

#people #libraries #waste #resources #money #computer #howevee #aides
Most communities have libraries, where people can read or study in utmost silence. A
library
 has become a feature of every functional settlement. The fact that some people think a
library
 is a waste of money or resources is appalling. A
library
 contains books and old newspapers that make research
easy
Suggestion
easier
 for a
lot
 of people.
Although
, some the books and materials found in a
library
 can be obsolete, they are still a
lot
 that provide a rich source of educational
information
 from a
lot
 of authors. The
short coming
a failing or deficiency
shortcoming
 of a a
library
 in looking for
information
 is, it is a slow process, where you have to scan and fiddle through many books or journals before you find the right material. Libraries,
also
 encourage interaction between humans as the new technology seems to be taking its toll on our relationship with each other. Computers have come to stay and are fast in providing
information
. Computers make research very easy. It is an efficient way for searching
information
. A
lot
information
 can be found on the internet more than is available in books. The computer age, is having a negative effect on our day to day relationship with one another. Libraries and computers have both their pros and cons and in my
opinion both
Accept comma addition
opinion, both
 should be used concurrently. Libraries should still contain books and computers should
also
 be available in the
library making
Accept comma addition
library, making
 the
library
 a more resourceful
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 when looking for
information
 or data.
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