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International travel make people prejudiced rather that broad minded. What are its causes? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

#travel #people #measures
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Nowadays, the travel industry has involved significantly and more tourists are
to go
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going
 abroad for travelling.
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, these trips developed bias in the tourists towards the
culture
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, and the locals do not find
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 comfortable. In
this
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 essay I intend to delve into the cases of
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 situation and suggest some ways to alleviate the problem. One of the major causes
to
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of
this
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 issue is the media portrayal of specific
countries
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country
 places and people, which led to the prejudices of the
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 about the local
culture
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. Recently, some reviewers to the cultures
on
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in
 the media only witness the superficial problems, not really
on
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at
 the core. There will be a misunderstanding between the positive and negative effects of the traditions if the media does not clarify them. Another reason which can be included is the nationalistic view of the countries. The mindsets between the developed and the developing countries are very different, so when the foreigners come to Vietnam,
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, they will have their thinking about the pollution, the traffic, causing the bad images
to
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of
 the countries. To tackle the problem, methods can be ruled out and awareness is the only cure to break the stereotypes. For
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, interactions amongst the local people and tourists must be rallied by encouraging home stays so that the differences between the reality and media can come to the surface.
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, tour operators should take the onus of guiding tourists about the main things of local
culture
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 and educate the tourists about the area values and
culture
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 so that they have a
deeply
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deep
 understanding and empathized look. To sum up, overseas travelling can bring the negative actions to the locals.
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, we can fix the issue if we are tolerant enough to empathize the people.
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