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You received a letter from your friend informing you about his elderly parents are coming to visit in your area and he is asking for your advise on - which places they should visit - where should they live - Invite them to do something with you

#friend #parents #visit #area #places
Dear Rahul, Hope,
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
yours
 are doing well! I wish even you could
accomply
put in effect
accomplish
 them. Anyways, there are plethora of thing that one can do in my hometown, but considering your parents are
religiuos
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
religious
, I have a few must do list for them. You can churn out a few of them as per their convenience.
First
 of all, your
mom
informal term for a mother
mum
 and dad are most welcome to stay at my place. But, the main attraction
are
Suggestion
is
 far from where I stay. So, I would recommend them to stay In
Tulip international hotel
Suggestion
the Tulip international hotel
a Tulip international hotel
, Vile Parle,
Mumbai which
Accept comma addition
Mumbai, which
 is
loacted
situated in a particular spot or position
located
 in the heart of the city as well as near to the airport and is budget friendly. And the main things to do is,
firstly
, I
storngly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
 suggest to do Mumbai
darshan
Suggestion
Darshan
, a one day tour of Mumbai's main attractions.
Secondly
, a holy visit to Siddhivinak Temple, it is one of the most famously holy
palce
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
 in
mumbai
a city in western India just off the coast of the Arabian Sea; India's most populous city; has the only natural deep-water harbor in western India
Mumbai
.
Last
 but not the least, Mumba
devi
 temple which in the heart of
mumbai
a city in western India just off the coast of the Arabian Sea; India's most populous city; has the only natural deep-water harbor in western India
Mumbai
 old market. I would love it if, they agree to let me take them to visit these temples. Please let me know their date of journey, that way I can plan
thier
of them or themselves
their
 entire tour. Lots of love, Abhishek
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