An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with these problems?

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The trend in migration of experts in the field of health and education

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the western world to offer their services is on the increase. There are often benefits enjoyed by the individuals in terms of

better

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a better life

life

for them and their families.

However

, the negative impacts caused by

this

heightened migration trend cannot be overemphasized on the economy of the developing countries left by these experts. I intend to extensively discuss some of these negative impacts as well as possible remedies to them in the

suceeding

coming after or following

succeeding

paragraphs. The importance of professionals like doctors and teacher in a society cannot be overemphasized, because not only do they help to save

life

and

shapen

make sharp or sharper

sharpen

shaping

shape

lives respectively, they actively

contibute

bestow a quality on

contribute

significantly to the county's GDP (Gross Domestic Profit). When there is a decrease in the amount of doctors available to attend to patients, there is a sharp increase in mortality rate.

For instance

, in Nigeria, statistics in the past five (5) years

reveals

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reveal

that hospitals nationwide have recorded approximately 20% increase in

mortality especially

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mortality, especially

among children under the ages of five (5) years and the elderly.

This

as a result

of these hospitals being overly understaffed. In the same light, Education which is

reffered

make reference to

referred

to as the mother of all

profession

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professions

is equally affected. To fill the gaps created by these professionals

abscounding

run away; usually includes taking something or somebody along

absconding

most often

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more often

than not, the children are left to be tutored by half baked, unqualified and unmotivated individuals. In the long run, the children and the society at large suffer the consequences which

includes

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include

churning out a large amount of half baked individuals who are mostly clueless

amongs

in division, with shares to each

amongst

among

others. Since it is quite evident that the factors that leads to these experts migrating to developed countries include the following: functional systems, better

life

, education, health and working policies etc.

which

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Which

majorly are a reflection of transparent leaders that consistently put policies in place to make the

life

of their citizens better.

Therefore

, I am of the opinion that the leaders in the poor countries should emulate those in the western world to ensure that the increasing trend in migration will experience a drastic decline.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Brain drain
Skilled labor
Developed nations
Essential services
Healthcare
Education
Economic impact
Social impact
Migration
Inequality
Disparity
Foreign aid
Investment
Community
Dependency

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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with these problems?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think, teachers do not need a training course. Discuss both views along with your opinion

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Write a letter to the publisher in a newspaper, asking to advertise a meeting of people from different countries you are organizing. Explain where, when and why

Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?