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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #idea #information #research #business #world
In
high competitive world
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a highly competitive world
highly competitive world
, most people think
that is
 it
great way
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a great way
 to share
knowledge
 as much as possible in studies, career, and scientific research. While other thinks that a
few
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little
information
 is very confidential to share openly. I believe that in most cases sharing
information
 is
good
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the best
 way of awareness about our society.
Firstly
, I think that people take negative effects from valuable
information
 like nowadays how science can misused against by man that cause undesirable consequence. Scientific
knowledge
 is neither good nor bad in itself. It is
man
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a man
the man
 who puts it
to
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in
on
 a good or bad use.
However
 greatest misuse of science is its use for
purpose
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purposes
the purpose
 of war. It has developed the fatal weapons like atoms and hydrogen bombs.
On the other hand
 Internet provides
wide range
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a wide range
 of material that can easily
accessed
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access
 with a few clicks. Young students spoil in academic dishonesty just copy paste their assignment without understanding the actual content even negative uses of cyber network. In
business people
Accept comma addition
business, people
 start to
hacks
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hack
 the personal
information
 like accessing the account details, credit cards and money transfer. But it depends on
person
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the person
people
 whom they take the
information
 as positive or negative because without
knowledge
 person cannot survive in
this
 world. Sharing
knowledge
 helped to achieve our
desire
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desired
 goals in the career, even enhancing our learning skills inside the communities. It helps to develop the
decisions
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decision
 power in any situation and how to behave and help our society. In conclusion, there
are
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is
 plethora of negative and positive aspects of sharing
knowledge
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knowledge, although I
although
 I believe that the possession of
knowledge
 without the ability for action was
may be
by chance
maybe
 the greatest immorality people might commit.
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