Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #children

Advertisements become very popular nowadays.

However

, some people believe that

Suggestion

advertising

aimed at children should be banned. I agree that it should be controlled tightly, not banned

comepletely

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

completely

. I'm going to discuss about

this

issue by

anylazing

the both

side

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sides

this

. On the one hand, advertisement bring us the up-to-date gadgets it helps us to update the recent

trendings

a general direction in which something tends to move

trends

and

also

help to comfort our life. Through the advertises

located at or attached to

TV or in the Internet, we can consider whether or not should buy a product.

On the other hand

, I think that advertisements aimed

expresses position, direction or location, or point in time

children should be controlled more tightly.

Firstly

, children

can not

cannot

distinguish whether a product is good or bad, when they see an eye-catching advertise with a

modelkid

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model kid

about their ages, they immediately bed their parents to buy it, without thinking.

For example

, when instant noodles

are advertised

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advertise

on TV, children keep asking their parents to buy

them but

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them, but

they don't know that it will be harmful to their future health.

Secondly

, we all know that watching TV for too long is bad for our eyesight, and now children are sticking their eyes to the small screen watching

advertisment

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some think that only those people who have worked for a company for many years should be promoted to a higher position. Do you agree?

News editors decide what to broadcast on Television and what to write in newspapers. What factors influence those decisions? Do you think we become used to bad news? Should more good news be reported?

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