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As Technology is advancing, some people think that soon there would be no role of teachers. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary epoch
technology
 is changing at a rapid pace and has replaced manpower with machines. Some people believe that the teaching methodology will be swapped by the
technology
 like it did in other sectors like
automobile
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automotive
 and manufacturing. I do not agree with the notion that
this
 is not going to happen any time soon in the future. There is no doubt that the output and efficiency of
technology
 for repeated tasks is far more superior than that of humans, but when it comes to teaching which needs supervision and attention, machines are way inferior to humans and
this
 development will take several decades. Students learn things from their parents in their early childhood and they are not habitual to learn through robots or pre-defined programs. So, it will become very difficult for them to adopt the new changes.
As a result
, their parents will not agree to teach them using new techniques.
However
, a
teacher
 can predict the learning capabilities of each student in a class and based on that he can give extra effort to weaker students so, that they
also
 grow well with other students.
Moreover
, a
teacher
also
 teaches moral and ethical values which
lay
set down according to a plan
laid
 the foundation to become a good human
in addition
 to a good student. Apart from that, artificial intelligence is not much advance which can help to motivate and build the confidence in a difficult
times
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time
 of the student.
Therefore
, an instructor will be needed to who can help to make the overall development of the child. In the end to conclude, I strongly reaffirm that to fill the shoes of the
teacher
 there is lot of improvement needs to be done in
technology
, which is not going to happen very early and students will be continuing their studies will help of
teacher

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