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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In many countries, the train is an important mode of
transport
. While some people feel that the government should provide funds to build new railway lines to connect many cities, other people argue that the money should
instead
 be spent on the improvement of the current public
transport
. There are valid views on both sides, which I will discuss now. On the one hand, in view of making many parts of the world accessible easily, introducing fast trains and new railway lines is a major step. By investing in
this
 project, the country’s economy will eventually be boosted because of the increased number of tourists arriving.
For example
, with the advent of ‘Train à Grande Vitesse’ in the late nineties in France, numerous destinations
such
 as Belgium, Germany and the UK became within reach of many people and around 110 million of passengers make use of these trains annually.
Moreover
, compared to planes, trains are a more convenient form of
transport
 because there are less hassles before boarding. As regards to the cost, it might
also
 be more affordable than airline tickets.
On the other hand
, investing money to ameliorate the existing public
transport
 could be a smart choice. Nowadays, with advances in technology, there are new buses in some countries with many features
such
 as wifi, air conditioning and a TV. These should be introduced in nations which have not yet received them.
Furthermore
, in some countries
such
 as in Mauritius, there is a lack of bus coverage in many localities, and
this
 can be a problem for the locals since they will have to take two or three modes of
transport
 before reaching their destination.
Therefore
, extending the bus coverage could be wise. A
further
 improvement would be to make public transports friendly for individuals with physical disabilities so as to ensure that they do not feel left out. In conclusion, I personally believe that the government can invest in extending railway lines to major cities to boost the economy, but
this
 should be done smoothly and gradually, provided that current public
transport
 is well maintained throughout the country and not left in a bad state.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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